Thursday, December 11, 2008

Creating a Haiku

Yesterday was Haiku day in eighth grade language. I love this day. We read several Haiku poems, talked about the structure (which they are already well aware of) and then they wrote their own. I gave them green slips of paper to write each on. For the first two I gave them general subjects (seasons, and things they like), and the last one they could write about whatever they liked. Here is a sampling:

I can't think of a Hiaku
So this will have to do it
Do not make fun of me.

Complete with spelling error, this poem speaks volumes about this student's insecurity and lack of self esteem. Clever subject, nonetheless.There were several others about the writing process, including:

She loves haiku
writing all the days
Oh! But he does not!

Today in this class
I like reading haikus here
It is all peaceful.

The small green paper,
is now right in front of me,
I write my haiku.

One was the remake of a joke, which I found amusing:

Your mom is so fat,
that she sat on a rainbow,
and skittles popped out.

Who knew that could be a haiku?

I really like salads
They taste really good with carrots
I really like salads

There were a lot of repeat first and third liners in the bunch...this being one of them. I find this one intriguing because it leaves me wondering if this student really likes carrots, or if tomatoes just didn't fit.

In the coolness of
the morning I feel like I
could run forever

This was mine. As I read all 48 haiku poems to the class (three per person including myself) they guessed who they thought wrote each. They guessed this one quickly. I guess I'm kind of surprised that the idea of running forever doesn't resonate with any of these middle school students.

Shopping is so fun
Spend money on whatever.
Let's go buy buy buy.

Tis the season...what can I say. Then, of course, there were some written about other students:

Austin is funny
sitting there slouching, laughing
thinking of classmates.

I love basketball
I beat Josh every single day
And Steve if he plays

In the end, there were a few thoughtful ones:

Go to the river.
May your catch be plentiful.
Bring me some, won't you?

I love this one. Such a tone of longing underneath the surface of wishing well.

Today in class they asked if I would read them again so they could guess..."Sorry guys, we have other great things to study today, like Alfred, Lord Tennyson and Ralph Waldo Emerson." They weren't convinced....perhaps someday they will be.


  1. eww, i loved this. i loved your haiku... so beautiful... so simple. i also loved the other one you said you liked: "bring me some, wont you?" beautiful, somehow.

    youre a good teacher

  2. I think you need to ideate a bit before writing you Haikus
    haiku poems